Is this a good MAID OF HONOR speech!?!?

Good Evening! For those of you who don't know me, I am Rachael, the very proud little sister of our glamorous Bride. I want to start by congratulating Grant and Jessica, and thanking all of you for coming here tonight.





I never knew Grant before he dated my sister, so I can't tell you horrible stories about him, but I can tell you that I think he is perfect for my sister!? I am very happy to welcome Grant into our family.





As far advice for my new brother in law: Grant, do not try to cuddle with her when she sleeps. I tried this, and every single night she would scream at me “Rachael, get off me!” But as soon as she fell back asleep, I would slide my leg back around her!





Jessica, you look absolutely gorgeous today. Two peas in a pod. Thick as thieves. Tight knit. Close as close can be. Of all the terms and clichés that describe our relationships, I think the word sister says it best. I couldn’t have asked for more. I try everyday, to be more like you. From you claiming that Grant wasn’t going to propose for many years, to me being jealous because of all the flowers Grant would send you ‘just because’. I always knew he was the one for you. When I got that phone call when you were in Nashville, I was overwhelmed with happiness for you. As you begin this new chapter in your life, I will still look to you for guidance because you helped me get this far. How blessed I am to have a big sister like you! Congratulations to my playmate, my mentor, my role model, my sister, and my best friend.





I've always heard that when two people get married, their nuptials have a positive effect on their community. Like someone dropping a pebble into still water, your love sends out ripples of happiness to everyone around u. It brings joy to those who have already said, “I do” as they fondly remember their wedding day. It brings hope to those who are still looking for that special someone.%26amp; it shows young children what they have to look forward to when they grow up. Two people brought together by the bonds of love %26amp; united in marriage are a powerful force. You bring happiness to those who are here to bear witness %26amp; those who couldn't attend, but carry you in their hearts. Emily Bronte once said: “Whatever our souls are made of, his and mine are the same.” Jessica %26amp; Grant, Your souls ARE the same, you make a perfect couple, you truly deserve each other and I know You WILL both have a long and happy life together.








Please raise your glass as I toast to my sister and her husband:


Here’s to love, laughter, and happily ever after! Cheers!Is this a good MAID OF HONOR speech!?!?
Eliminate the two paragraphs below (they are awful). The rest makes a very nice speech.





I never knew Grant before he dated my sister, so I can't tell you horrible stories about him, but I can tell you that I think he is perfect for my sister!? I am very happy to welcome Grant into our family.





As far advice for my new brother in law: Grant, do not try to cuddle with her when she sleeps. I tried this, and every single night she would scream at me “Rachael, get off me!” But as soon as she fell back asleep, I would slide my leg back around her!Is this a good MAID OF HONOR speech!?!?
get rid of the paragraph that reads '; as far as advice'; and the entire paragraph after the first sentence ';jessica you look gorgeous today'; get rid of the whole paragraph after that. keep the first paragraph, and the second, it is a little funny, and the one that starts, '; ive always heard';





the reason to get rid of the two i have indicated is because they are personal between you and your older sister and are far far far far too intimate and personal to be included in what is just to be a short toast to the couple.





this toast is not about you or you and your sister and your past. make that part of the toast at the reheasal dinner the night before if you must. but it is never ever ever correct or smart to say things like this at someones wedding reception, the other parts are fine. you are a good sister to care about this, and i think it is very very smart of you to be prepared with words to say, cause i have been to weddings where bestmen fumble thru toasts they did not bother to prepare and that does not reflect well on the bride and groom. good for you that you care so much!!!!!!
sniffle, sniffle, she is gonna love that.





i hope my sister works this hard for my day....





it only looks long but when its being said it wont be and i think i see the humor and respect in those last paragraphs.





sounds good to me!!
Great starters. So me I would say eliminate the fourth paragraph and you got a winner. I don't care for that part. Keep it light. Plus someone like me who doesn't know the family and hear the jealous part is not that great. Kind of Too Much Info and typical. That paragraph kinda talks too much about you sister and not enough about marriage like the following verse. Be sure to look both in the eyes as you talk and speak from your heart because I already felt it in your speech. Elimiate - ';Two peas in a pod. Thick as thieves. Tight knit. Close as close can be. Of all the terms and clichés that describe our relationships, I think the word sister says it best. I couldn’t have asked for more. I try everyday, to be more like you. From you claiming that Grant wasn’t going to propose for many years, to me being jealous because of all the flowers Grant would send you ‘just because’. I always knew he was the one for you. When I got that phone call when you were in Nashville, I was overwhelmed with happiness for you.
u should say something like i never knew grant before my sister so i can't tell u funny embarassing stories about him...instead of horrible.





and as far as the advice for grant it sounds a lil weird (no offense) maybe u should take that out.





I think it's great but just try to maybe cut it down a little. it seems a little long for a speech at a wedding. but if not it is a very sweet nice speech! GOOD LUCK!!
Why are you giving a speech???


Only the father of the bride (or the person who is paying for the wedding) is supposed to give a speech welcoming everyone to the wedding.


Then the best man is supposed to give a toast, a short toast, not a speech.





Maybe you can give your speech at the rehearsal dinner, but no one wants to listen to you when they ought to be dancing.
I love it. it made me teary eyed, however when you said that you couldnt tell horrible stories about Grant I would say I can't tell you funny and embaresing (im horrible at spelling?) about him. Good Luck!
It's very good.





One minor tweek. I would start by thanking the guests for attending and skip the ';for those that don't know me'; simply say, I'm Rachel, etc.





And also, I wouldn't say that you didn;t know him before he dated your sister, that's pretty much irrelevant and the following remark has a somewhat negative vibe.





Advising a newlywed couple not to cuddle is not apropiate, I know that you are trying to be funny, but it really isn't.





Shorten it up a little and you'll be fine.





Good luck
It is sweet, but a bit too long and detailed. I would leave out the last 2 paragraphs completely and take out the ';advice'; part, a few other little tweaks, and you have a fantastic speech....














Good Evening! I am Rachael, the very proud little sister of our glamorous Bride. I want to start by congratulating Grant and Jessica, and thanking all of you for coming here tonight.





I never knew Grant before he dated my sister, so I can't tell you any embarrasing stories about him, but I can tell you that I think he is perfect for my sister!? I am very happy to welcome Grant into our family.





Jessica, you look absolutely gorgeous today. Two peas in a pod. Thick as thieves. Tight knit. Close as close can be. Of all the terms and clichés that describe our relationships, I think the word sister says it best. I couldn’t have asked for more. I try everyday, to be more like you. From you claiming that Grant wasn’t going to propose for many years, to me being jealous because of all the flowers Grant would send you ‘just because’. I always knew he was the one for you. When I got that phone call when you were in Nashville, I was overwhelmed with happiness for you. As you begin this new chapter in your life, I will still look to you for guidance because you helped me get this far. How blessed I am to have a big sister like you! Congratulations to my playmate, my mentor, my role model, my sister, and my best friend.








Please raise your glass as I toast to my sister and her husband:


Here’s to love, laughter, and happily ever after! Cheers!











----Good luck Rachael!
I agree w/ luvtoanswer! TMI and too wordy... keep in mind the bestman gets to speak too and usually the Father of the Bride. People don't want to be hearing speechs for an hour!
I have to agree with a previous answerer...PLEASE drop those 2 paragraphs (2 %26amp; 3). They sound really awkward, and if I were at the reception, it would make me rather uncomfortable. Also, it does seem just a tad long, even with taking out those paragraphs. It does convey your feelings for her, but there's just a few too many chichés. The last part is really great--cute and fun and sweet! If I were you, I'd do it like this:


Good Evening! For those of you who don't know me, I am Rachael, the proud little sister of the Bride. I want to start by congratulating Grant and Jessica, and thanking all of you for coming here tonight.





Jessica, Of all the terms and clichés that describe our relationship--two peas in a pod, thick as thieves, tight knit--I think the word sister says it best. I couldn’t have asked for more. I try everyday, to be more like you. From the moment I heard you and Grant were engaged, I was overwhelmed with happiness for you because I know that he is the one for you. As you begin this new chapter in your life, I will still look to you for guidance because you helped me get this far. How blessed I am to have a big sister like you! Congratulations to my playmate, my role model, my sister, and my best friend.





Emily Bronte once said: “Whatever our souls are made of, his and mine are the same.” Jessica %26amp; Grant, Your souls ARE the same, you make a perfect couple, you truly deserve each other and I know You WILL both have a long and happy life together.





Please raise your glass as I toast to my sister and her husband:


Here’s to love, laughter, and happily ever after! Cheers!
I agree with Luv2Answer... eliminate paragraphs 2 %26amp; 3 (I never knew Grant.... and As far as advice....) and the rest is great!!!
Perfect except that instead of , ';I never knew Grant before he dated my sister, so I can't tell you horrible stories about him, but I can tell you that I think he is perfect for my sister!? I am very happy to welcome Grant into our family.





As far advice for my new brother in law: Grant, do not try to cuddle with her when she sleeps. I tried this, and every single night she would scream at me “Rachael, get off me!” But as soon as she fell back asleep, I would slide my leg back around her! ';, I would just say. ';I think that Jessica and Grant are so perfect for each other, and I am very happy to welcome Grant into our family.';
Very lengthy. You will bore the crowd.People will begin to drift away. Nice but just shorten it up a bit