Friday, August 20, 2010

What is your opinion on my short story... good enough?

I am writing a short story for my senior writing class. I have been taking it pretty seriously, but for the longest time, I haven't known how to end it. I think I finally decided! Originally, I was thinking someone would die or fall ill... but I just don't think it needs that. and besides, there isn't enough time in a day to figure all of that out. Here is a summary of my story:





The protagonist is a married woman with two children. She has recently become pregnant again. Her husband is away on a business trip (he of course knew of her pregnancy before he left). She is now beginning to feel tired and run-down because she cares for the girls all the time as well as the house, and now they are going to have a third child. One day, she talks to her friend, whose husband died a year ago in a car accident, about how she has been feeling. In this conversation, the friend reveals to the protagonist that she once thought her husband was cheating on her, but now she regrets ever thinking that. This of course, puts the idea in the protagonists head, so she goes home wondering if her husband is cheating on her. A couple days later when her husband comes home, she is dreading seeing him. Soon, they get in an argument as the protagonist attempts to tell him her thoughts, and he ends up accusing her of cheating. She gets angry and locks herself in the bathroom. The husband leaves the house and she is worried he took the girls with him. While she is in the bathroom, she begins to think about abortion as a way of getting back at her husband. She seriously considers it, but then pretty much talks herself out of it, although the reader really isnt sure at this point. When she finally leaves the bathroom, she finds the girls watching television in the living room. She is relieved. Then she goes into the kitchen to find that the dinner she had set out on the table for later was gone. She begins to get angry, thinking he took it with him, but then she sees a note, that basically says hes sorry, everything is going to be okay, he loves her and their three children, and he will be home soon. She then notices a pleasant odor, and realizes the oven is on. Inside, the steaks are cooking.





Good enough? Not to dramatic, not to boring. I would just like to know what others think. Thanks!What is your opinion on my short story... good enough?
yea.. pretty good :)What is your opinion on my short story... good enough?
yeah well, good for a short story, but l think you can do it better

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